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TERRIFIC idea.

Start with a "Why Is This Study Important To Parents?" section.

You did great with the translation you did. It's still way too long and technical. Parents just need the basics, the BASIC basics. I suggest that your goal be to use the same language you would use explaining it to your neighbor while chatting over your backyard fence, or chatting before or after a meeting with someone. Casual, straightforward, plain language.

Leave out the numbers and charts. Too technical. And also overblown. This is fancy dressing up of a silly multiple-choice questionnaire, only a little bit more detailed than the questionnaire people fill out about their health every time they go to the doctor.

Keep It Simple and Short. Use bullet points.

Add "What Do Trans Activists Claim That This Proves?" section and a "Why Does It Not Prove That At All?" sections.

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