Start with a "Why Is This Study Important To Parents?" section.
You did great with the translation you did. It's still way too long and technical. Parents just need the basics, the BASIC basics. I suggest that your goal be to use the same language you would use explaining it to your neighbor while chatting over your backyard fence, or chatting before or after a meeting with someone. Casual, straightforward, plain language.
Leave out the numbers and charts. Too technical. And also overblown. This is fancy dressing up of a silly multiple-choice questionnaire, only a little bit more detailed than the questionnaire people fill out about their health every time they go to the doctor.
Keep It Simple and Short. Use bullet points.
Add "What Do Trans Activists Claim That This Proves?" section and a "Why Does It Not Prove That At All?" sections.
I think you're right about an even simpler summary - maybe it needs an equivalent to the abstract or an executive summary at the top and then those who want to can read deeper.
I have a LOT to say about the validity of the assertions and the data, but I was planning on writing that up separately - my idea was to just flatly report what the study contains with no opinion and then write separate pieces covering interpretation of the data and its limitations.
Will think about this though - perhaps it would be better all in one place, or at least something that brings it all together somewhere.
TERRIFIC idea.
Start with a "Why Is This Study Important To Parents?" section.
You did great with the translation you did. It's still way too long and technical. Parents just need the basics, the BASIC basics. I suggest that your goal be to use the same language you would use explaining it to your neighbor while chatting over your backyard fence, or chatting before or after a meeting with someone. Casual, straightforward, plain language.
Leave out the numbers and charts. Too technical. And also overblown. This is fancy dressing up of a silly multiple-choice questionnaire, only a little bit more detailed than the questionnaire people fill out about their health every time they go to the doctor.
Keep It Simple and Short. Use bullet points.
Add "What Do Trans Activists Claim That This Proves?" section and a "Why Does It Not Prove That At All?" sections.
Thanks Hazel :)
I think you're right about an even simpler summary - maybe it needs an equivalent to the abstract or an executive summary at the top and then those who want to can read deeper.
I have a LOT to say about the validity of the assertions and the data, but I was planning on writing that up separately - my idea was to just flatly report what the study contains with no opinion and then write separate pieces covering interpretation of the data and its limitations.
Will think about this though - perhaps it would be better all in one place, or at least something that brings it all together somewhere.